ついに来てしまったテスト前日～。
いつもながら気分が悪い。
今回はよく勉強する時間あったと思うんだけど
今日の模擬テストもオンライン英会話も
初心者にもどっちゃった。
なんかIELTS本当嫌いだ～。
英語学校でも行こうかな？
ネイティブキャンプ
計４４回のレッスンで１７時間半オンラインレッスンしました～。
前回５．５だったから本当６．０に上がっててほしい。
でもいろんな意味で少し思い出ができたな～。
ベストティーチャーで最終調整
一応最後にやったパート２のライティング添削結果！
相変わらず間違えだらけだけど、また６．０狙います。
６．５出てくれたら最高だけどまだまだだな～って思う。
序論
自分の回答
It is sometimes argued that immunisation programs should be taken compulsory to children. I generally disagree with this opinion because parents have entitled to be denied for any vaccination injection for their children.
先生の添削
It is sometimes argued that immunisation programs should be taken compulsory for children. I generally disagree with this opinion because parents are entitled to deny any vaccination injection to their children.
パラグラフ１
自分の回答
It is certainly true that immunisation programs can improve immunity system in children’s physical. In recent years, we detected any dangerous illness in the world because we can travel easily around the wold. As a result, we have opportunities to interact with many people. This can cause to influence an enormous new thread of virus around the world. Therefore, vaccination is very important to protect children. Besides, immunisation programs have brought about great relief to their parents. This have a great positive impact especially for first baby’s parents.
先生の添削
It is certainly true that immunisation programs can improve the immunity system in children’s physical being. In recent years, we detected any dangerous illness in the world because we can travel easily around the world. As a result, we have opportunities to interact with many people. This can cause to influence an enormous new thread of viruses around the world. Therefore, vaccination is very important to protect children. Besides, immunisation programs have brought about great relief to their parents. This has a great positive impact especially for the first baby’s parents.
パラグラフ２
自分の答え
On the other hands, From an objective viewpoint, vaccination is not exclusively worked to eradicating all harmful diseases. I read the article about vaccination programs that said a large number of children have been died caused to take a vaccination. Statistically, this cases were rare. but It is not perfect figure. Another important point is that, Parents should be have the right to reject such programs.For example, If they detect any harmful substance in the vaccination products. It have to be stopped to take them for children. However, if the government force to take them vaccination injection making the strict law. They will not reject this abject chemical products. As for the human right,It should be decide d more flexibly.
先生の添削
On the other hand, from an objective viewpoint, vaccination is not exclusively worked to eradicating all harmful diseases. I read the article about vaccination programs that said a large number of children have died due to taking a vaccination. Statistically, these cases were rare but it is not a perfect figure. Another important point is that, parents should have the right to reject such programs. For example, if they detect any harmful substance in the vaccination products. It has to be stopped to be given to children. However, if the government forces them to take the vaccination injection making the strict law, they will not reject these abject chemical products. As for human rights, it should be decided more flexibly.
結論
自分の答え
In conclusion, although Immunisation programs have a number of significant advantages in children’s life. I believe that we need to consider more flexible way to receive them. In my opinion, even though we will face with epidemic disaster like corona virus. we have to carefully consider to make decision for our children’future.
先生の添削